The graph below shows the percentage of part-time workers in each country of the United Kingdom in 1980 and 2010.

The bar charts compare the short-time employees in the United Kingdom's countries in 1980 and 2010.

Overall

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it is clear that

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Wales and England were higher than Northern

Ireland

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and

Scotland

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Also

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in 2010, part-time workers were more than in 1980 except in Northern

Ireland

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Firstly

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, there was the highest percentage in Wales was nearly %35 and followed by England was just above %30 in 2010.

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, they were similar to 1980 but, less than 2010. England was approximately %25 and Wales we just over %30.

On the other hand

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, Northern

Ireland

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and

Scotland

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were completely different from each other. In 1980 NorthernNorthen

Ireland

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was around %25,

otherwise

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Scotland

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was just above %10. when we at in 2010,

Ireland

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went down and it was over %10.

However

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Scotland

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increased to just belove %20.

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Jun 27, 2023

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Vocabulary: Replace the words ireland, scotland with synonyms.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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133 words

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