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The diagram given illustrates a linear process of making a paper and the stages are included in this process. Overall, it is clear that there are 9 main steps to produce a paper which can be organized into 3 stages. These include cutting down trees to transfer them, storing and processing them to manufacture papers, and finally producing papers to be consumed in different industries. The process commences with trees being chopped down. Then they are transformed by a lorry to the De-barking to be stored there. Following this, the trees are gone into a chipping machine to be chipped and prepared for the next step. Next, the chipped trees are gone into the mechanical pulping process, chemical pulping process, and hydra pulping. Then, they are cleaned and screened in order to go into a paper-making machine. Finally, it is ready to be consumed by consumers.

The diagram given illustrates a linear process of making a paper and the stages are included in this process. Overall, it is clear that there are 9 main steps to produce a paper which can be organized into 3 stages. These include cutting down trees to transfer them, storing and processing them to manufacture papers, and finally producing papers to be consumed in different industries. The process commences with trees being chopped down. Then they are transformed by a lorry to the De-barking to be stored there. Following this, the trees are gone into a chipping machine to be chipped and prepared for the next step. Next, the chipped trees are gone into the mechanical pulping process, chemical pulping process, and hydra pulping. Then, they are cleaned and screened in order to go into a paper-making machine. Finally, it is ready to be consumed by consumers.
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The diagram given illustrates a linear
process
 of making a paper and the stages are included in
this
process
.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 there are 9 main steps to produce a paper which can be organized into 3 stages. These include cutting down
trees
 to transfer them, storing and processing them to manufacture papers, and
finally
 producing papers to be consumed in different industries. The
process
 commences with
trees
 being chopped down.
Then
 they are transformed by a lorry to the De-barking where the raw product is stored there.
Following
this
, the
trees
 are gone into a chipping machine to be chipped and prepared for the next step.
Next,
the chipped
trees
 are gone into the mechanical pulping
process
, chemical pulping
process
, and hydra pulping. As required, they are cleaned and screened in order to go into a paper-making machine.
Finally
, it is ready to be consumed by consumers.
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