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Some people believe that social media sites, such as face book or twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 Era, masses mostly spend their
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 on internet
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. So, Many
individuals
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 think that social
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sites
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, like Facebook or Twitter, Have a bad impact on youth individual and their ability to form personal relationships
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 others believe that these websites bring the masses together in the best way to connect with each other. I agree with both statements So,
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 essay will discuss both
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 of the paragraph. Nowadays,
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 totally depend on social
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 they lots of work and free
time
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 spend on social
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sites
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 for multiple purposes. If there talk about the youth generation they entire
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 spend on social
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sites
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 as Facebook and Twitter
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 Instagram.
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 many disadvantages of social
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 because
people
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 like to talk with their friends and relatives through online mode rather than personal meet.
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, the Confidence level is very low in the new generation, The reason is they did not communicate with
people
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 face to face.
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, I saw many divorce cases in my family cause of social
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sites
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.
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,
people
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 did not spend their
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 with their family members,
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 is a very bad impact on human personal life and
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 a bad effect on their professional life.
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, social
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 is the best platform for business.
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, Many companies run their business through social
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sites
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 and they earn lots of money
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,
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 is earning way for many
individuals
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,
people
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 easily connect with unknown
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 and develop
a strong bonds
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a strong bond
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 with strangers.
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,
individuals
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 easily convey their problems and complaints to organisations through these social
media
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sites
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. In conclusion, I agree with both arguments there are many disadvantages of social
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sites
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 but here, many advantages
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social
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sites
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.
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,
individuals
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 take benefits rather than miss uses of
facebook
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 and Twitter. ;
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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