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The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012

The maps below illustrate how Frenton changed from 1990 to 2012
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The two maps
shows
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 how
town
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 called Frenton altered during the 22 years.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there was considerable
changed
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 was introduced, blocks of flats, cinema , and restaurant, technopark , supermarket , and
also
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 some buildings was unchanged , and other was extended. Looking at the map in more detail, In
north
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 playing fields with trees
was
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were
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 changed into blocks of flats. In
northeast
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the northeast
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 new flats
was
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were
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builded
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built
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. In the east of the
maps
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 homes
was
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 replaced with blocks of
falts
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flats
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. In the middle of the
maps
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 the café and parks
was
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 converted into
hotel
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a hotel
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 and
glof
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golf
 course and
also
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 the high street was unchanged. In the
south
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 the
theater
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theatre
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 was changed into cinema. In the
eastsouth
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east south
east-south
 shops was replaced with
supermarket
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the supermarket
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. In the northwest the school was unaltered and the bank redeveloped into
restaurant
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the restaurant
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. In the
center
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 of the
map
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 the hospital was enlarged and
also
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 the library
still
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 unchanged . In the
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west south
west-south
westsouth
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 the trees
cut
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are cut
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 down and converted into technopark.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 3 times.
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