Many young people today leave school with a negative attitude towards learning. Why is this the case? What can be done to encourage a positive attitute to learning in young people?

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Nowadays, many young
people
leave
school
with a negative
attitude
towards learning. Some young
people
think learning is useless, and others think money is not equal to learning, who only want to make money and
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want to waste teme
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learning. For young
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their
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and ideas are largely
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impressed
by the internet and actors. They
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think learning is important. The young
people
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money.
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young
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our country,s future. The young
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people
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conntry
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country
will
also
become strong.
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young
people
should have a
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positive
attitude
to learning. Learning is the
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significant
for
people
, especially for young
people
, which is because
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young
people
haven
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,
t
learn something that will result in unemployment. The young
people
only want to make
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money
or play,
however
, no
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, no gain. If young
peple Contitue
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people continue
to stay thinking and playing
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who
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and
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do
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,
t
realise the importance of
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learning
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, when the young
people
really grow, they will find they can'
t
do anything. And the result is that the young
people
will
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for they have wasted
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valued
time
of their life. But the shame for the
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young
people
is too late. The best
time
for young
people
to learn is the present
time
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the
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young
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people
can from the simplest to the most difficult knowledge. Learning and
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knowledge
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very
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, the young
people
should find their interest and talents. The interest is the best teacher. Some young
people
like
play
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to play
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Cemputer,
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the young
people
can learn computer
progrom
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programs
to create their own computer games.
Besides
, some young
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people
tike
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plane
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planes
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,
then
the young
people
must fam relative
knouledge
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knowledge
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the plane
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plane
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planes
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, and they
also
should go to
school
to learn Some
theoritical
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theoretical
knowledge so that they can really put theory into practice.
Thus
, the
school
is for the young
people
to achieve their dreams. So if the young
people
learn
school
and enter the
sociey
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society
.
Then
they will
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be far
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away from their original ideal and dream.
Positive
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A positive
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attitude
to learning is very important for young
people
. And young
people
should have
confidente
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confidence
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of
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in
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theirselves
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themselves
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.
The learning
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is help them to
achive
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achieve
ideals and dreams. The young
people
onght
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ought
to have a correct
attitude
towards to the learning.
The learning
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is
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and
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limited
and it can
freely
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be freely
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and unblocked to share between young
people
and everyone in society.
Therefore
, for young
people
, they should cherish their young
time
, find
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self dream
self-dream
and achieve it.
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