Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
It is true that nowadays some pupils benefit from their smartphones more and more every day. There are some significant reasons for
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and I personally believe it is a negative development and creates some important drawbacks. The reasons and problems will be addressed in Linking Words
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Regarding the reasons, the most substantial reason is the parents do not have enough time with them, Linking Words
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, the children have to benefit from the mobiles in their leisure time. Another prominent reason is that children do not have a good environment for their physical activities, and, in consequence, they are enthusiastic to spend their energies on digital games. Linking Words
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, if a suitable playground exists, the pupils will be able to play and communicate with their friends and all their energies will be spent.
As for the problems, interpersonal skills play a prominent role in the children’s lives, Linking Words
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, playing digital games will limit all their basic skills. Linking Words
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, communication ability will be created when a child finds new friends in a park. Another vital drawback is children’s obesity. What I mean by Linking Words
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is that if the pupils do not have enough physical exercise they will be fat and Linking Words
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matter would be completely harmful.
In conclusion, there is a fact that today smartphones are the most significant hobby for children, Linking Words
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the fact that families do not have enough time and a good playground. I personally believe Linking Words
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matter causes a collection of problems, Linking Words
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as children’s obesity and poor communication.Linking Words
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite