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In most countries, despite the benefits of cycling, fewer and fewer people are using bicycles as a means of transportation. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Looking at the task below, which is concerning the vantages to drive a bicycle, but that people prefer to avoid, giving a space for some other truckage, it's evident the way in which two views give the opportunity to think and express a proper idea about it, after several comparisons.
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 is related to auxiliary staff nowadays preferring using a carriage
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 as a car, bus or motor, rather than a bicycle. The reasons can be many, here it is why is dominant to consider the whole circumstances.
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, they might prefer quick services for the type of
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 that are living; or rather becoming a successful business person means, that your image,
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 as your punctuality at work is the key to your carrier and using shipping as the bicycle is not the best thing to do, because the traffic is not always very helpful. In comparison, the second
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 is connected with those which, despite the new million inventions, still protect the ambient, giving less smoke to breathe for those who are taking part in
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 world. Has already been mentioned,
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 for
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 could be many motivations,
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 as protection of ambient, with a consequence of a healthy
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, keeping our body fits with exercise and because in
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 way the new technologies will not take over our standard
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. From my personal
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, after having made a comparison and analysed where it was relevant, I absolutely agree with self-same who sustain that, living our
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 without letting new inventions take over us, is the best decision to follow; And the only motivation is because my
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 as my body is in perfect conditions because I always preferred healthy style
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 rather the laziness.
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, I suppose that
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 is happening
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 that, to
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 day people are becoming lazy than they used to be because for them the facilities are saving money. In conclusion, with what has been mentioned, it's crucial to highlight the solution to
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 problem. Starting to think, about what should be done about
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 problem, taking into consideration the action from the government as the citizens too.
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