IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 8

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You recently stayed at a hotel and you had a great time. Write a letter to the hotel. In your letter thank the manager and his staff give some particular examples of why you enjoyed your stay at the hotel so much explain that you have written a review of the hotel on a popular website for tourists You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in regard to my recent stay at your hotel and express my gratitude to all the staff members. I would like them to know that I had an amazing experience
overall
,
Firstly
, the manager and his staff really made it comfortable for my family in terms of service and timely check-ups.
In addition
, they
also
 made it possible for us to get a sea-facing room. My parents and I loved
this
 gesture since it was my parent's wedding anniversary.
Furthermore
, the room service was on time and we received everything without any delay or problems.
Additionally
, the food was delicious which made it even better. The kitchen crew
also
 managed to surprise us with a complimentary cake since they wanted to be a part of my parent's anniversary celebration. That was indeed a sweet moment. I have written a positive review on the hotel's website and I hope more tourists come to stay. Thank you for being so thoughtful and I look forward to coming again. Your Faithfully, Lavin
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Writing Tone
Try to maintain a consistent and formal tone throughout the letter by avoiding some informal expressions like 'made it possible'. Consider rephrasing to enhance the formality.
Coherence
To further improve coherence, ensure that the transition between paragraphs maintains the flow of ideas, perhaps linking the positive experiences in the hotel to your decision to write a review.
Task Achievement
The letter excellently addresses all parts of the task by expressing gratitude, providing specific examples, and mentioning the review on a tourist website.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall structure of your letter is logical and easy to follow, making it exceptionally coherent and cohesive.
Greeting and Closing
Your ending is polite and sums up the overall positive experience effectively, enhancing the concluding part of your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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