Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Vegetarianism is becoming more and more popular among many people, particularly because of the harm that some people believe
meat
can cause to the body.
However
, I strongly believe that it is not necessary for everybody to be a vegetarian. Vegetarians believe that
flesh
is unhealthy because of the diseases it has been connected with. There has been much research to suggest that red
meat
is particularly bad,
for example
, and that consumption should be limited to eating it just a few times a week to avoid certain types of cancer. Meats can
also
be high in saturated fats so they have been linked to health problems
such
as cardiovascular disease and diabetes.
However
, there are strong arguments for eating
flesh
. The first reason is that as humans we are designed to eat
meat
, which suggests it is not unhealthy, and we have been eating
flesh
for thousands of years.
For instance
, cavemen made hunting implements so that they could kill animals and eat their
meat
.
Besides
, the
flesh
is a rich source of protein which helps to build muscles and bones. Vegetarians often have to take supplements to get all the essential vitamins and minerals.
On the other hand
, it may be the case that too much
meat
is harmful, but we can easily limit the amount we have without having to cut it out of our diet completely.
To sum up
, I do not agree that everyone should turn to a vegetarian diet.
Although
the overconsumption of
flesh
could possibly be unhealthy, a balanced diet of
meat
and vegetables should result in a healthy body.
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