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In the future, people may no longer be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? why do you think some people might not be happy to give up using cash?

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Technology
 has found its way into every aspect of our lives, including the way we pay for things in shops.
Following
this
 trend, I believe that we will not need to use
cash
 in the future. First of all, new generations that have grown with
technology
, have become dependent on multiple electronic devices
such
 as smartphones, tablets and...etc, to perform even the simplest tasks. These
people
 can be seen holding their phones at all levels and times, which makes it easier for them to process payment with something they already have in their hands.
In addition
, as fashion is
also
 playing a vital role in our society, being able to process payment with an electronic device
such
 as a card, is not only saving us time in counting
cash
 but keeps us up with the fashion when it comes to carrying thongs. Actually, it can be seen on a day-to-day basis in both, men and women, when they are getting ready to go out. Taking only their phone, a couple of cards and keys.
On the other hand
, some
people
 find it more unpractical because they believe that using modern ways to pay
instead
 using
cash
 can inflict serious problems that are inevitable.
For instance
, they might receive extra charges and taxes in their account when they use an ATM.
Furthermore
,
technology
 can be interruptable in some sensitive and occasional conditions where the community have to process payment immediately and it may bring unforgettable consequences.
For example
, when
people
 tend to participate in the lottery there is a need to pay in advance.
To conclude
, even though there are both advocates and detractors for giving up using
cash
, from my point of view using new
technology
such
 as debate cards can lead to consuming less time in shopping centres
as well as
 when
people
 prepare to go out.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • convenient
  • efficiency
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  • tangibility
  • privacy
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