The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.

The chart below shows how much money is spent in the budget on different sectors by the UAE government in 2000.
The pie chart illustrates information about how UAE authorities spent the public
budget
in ten sectors in a specific year.
Overall
,
it is clear that
social security received the highest percentage of expenditure from
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while
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transport was the lowest percentage of expenditure. Looking at the chart in more detail, the highest proportion of
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budget
was allocated for social security at 100
billion
AED and followed by health and personal social services was 53 AED
billion
. The third sector was education at 38
billion
AED ,and both of
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expenditures and debt interest was have the same value funding at 23
billion
AED. The fifth sector was
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defence at 22
billion
ADE. Regarding
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sectors, the value of funding from
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budget
for law and order and housing, heritage , and
environment
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was 17 and 15
billion
AED , respectively. The industry, agriculture and employment and transport
was
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the lowest
secors
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sectors
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received funds
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13 and 9
billion
AED , respectively.
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