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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to Orr work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Language is the only source by which a person can communicate with another person. A group of individuals states that most of the population only learn other
languages
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 either travel to different countries or for a
job
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.Some modernist claims that work and travel are not the necessary reason why
people
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 learn a foreign language. I believe, a maximum number of
people
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 only learn different
languages
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 so that they can work in different countries and easily earn money. In these looming paragraphs, I will discuss both aspects. To commence with, more than 90% of the graduates sit for
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 interviews at campus placement, and only 10% of the youth have some different goals, and
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90% of the students are hired by most of the US companies. So,
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 all these students have to be very fluent in English.
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, a community who wants to explore other regions
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 learn more
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, so that they can connect with
people
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, learn their culture and easily explore the place.
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, in a country like
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 90% of the graduates got a
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 in the US-based IT companies, so it is mandatory for each individual to be fluent in English.
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, an everyday uncountable number of incidents occur each day around the world, so the public learns different
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 just to keep them updated on what actually is happening in other countries.
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, most population invest money in stock markets where
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 even a small factor is very important, so investors
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 learn other
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 to know more about the place and society,
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 only they could be assured how to convert more leads into their clients. In a nutshell, each aspect has its own benefits.
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 some societies can think that
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 learn foreign
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 for multiple reasons like to update themselves, or to explore their businesses, I believe a maximum number of
people
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 prefer to learn multiple
languages
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 only because of getting a secured
job
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 in another country or to travel.
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