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Youth drug abuse is a serious problem. What are the possible causes of this behavior? Do you have any suggestion to control that?

#youth #drug #abuse #behavior #suggestion #control
Recently
drug
abuse
 is not only
the
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 problem among adults but
also
 is rapidly widespread among
youngsters
.
This
 issue stems from a number of causes
which
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 several solutions will be proposed in
this
 essay. To note down the possible reasons for youth
drug
abuse
, one of the main causes of
drug
abuse
 among young people is the influence of their family on them. Children raised in families where their parents are addicted to addictive substances
such
 as drugs or alcohol might be affected in certain ways. Another rationale that might dramatically affect
youngsters
 is social media.
Nowaday
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, social media is like a double-edged sword to
youngsters
 for its variety of information and entertainment. It is not difficult to find a scene of
drug
 use in a movie which might stimulate the curiosity of
youngsters
 to try it out and get addicted after that. In order to solve the aforementioned problem, several actions can be taken.
Firstly
, education about
drug
abuse
 must be taught at school
as well as
 in families to raise awareness and prevention, teenagers must be aware of the severe
damages
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 drugs bring to their life before having any intention to try.
In addition
 to
this
, governments must discuss strict law enforcements about
drugs
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drug
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purchasing
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 towards
youngsters
as well as
 severe punishments should be taken to
drug
 dealers in order to limit illegal
drug
 traffic. In conclusion, solutions to
this
 alarming problem must be taken into action the sooner the better for the sake of young generations
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