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You recently read an article in a newspaper about your childhood friend with whom you have lost contact for a long time. Write a letter to the editor. In your letter: Say which edition and when did the article appear Explain why you lost contact with your friend Say how you want them to help you to get back in touch

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Dear Editor, I am Mr. Krittipong Wong, writing
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 to an article published on 27th Oct in your new paper Daily News about Mr. Pongdaj Pirom. The article is about How to Gain Yield in a factory in the modern day. It’s a half-page article about his opinion on the latest technology trend in the global industry.
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, I would like to inform you that he is my college friend with whom I lost contact because of
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 out of Korat
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 year 2007 because of a job transfer. As I had to move to Bangkok. Office work and other priorities have led to
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 of communication with him. So, I would like to request you provide
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 contact details like his personal mobile phone and his personal email. Once I receive these details I will try to get in touch with him either by calling him or by sending an email to his personal email ID. I kindly look forward to your reply soon. Sincerely yours, Kittipong W.
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task response
Ensure to fully respond to all parts of the task in a more structured manner.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain coherence by organizing the letter into clear paragraphs, with each paragraph focused on a single main idea.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary, including more sophisticated and varied expressions to enhance the overall writing.
grammatical range
Employ a broader and more complex range of grammatical structures, such as complex sentences and varied verb tenses, to showcase a higher level of language proficiency.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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