The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
diagram depicts the life cycle of a species of
a
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large fish called the
salmon
.
Salmon
has three stages of growing up. First
as
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a small fish
that is
called fry which is approximately 3 to 8cm small. The second stage will be called
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smolt which is 12 to 15cm small.
Then
the third and
last
stage would be
of
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adult
salmon
and it is size would
approximately
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70 to 76cm.
Salmon
fishes usually lay their eggs under reels which has small stones under
it
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and at that time they are called
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fry, when they are approximately 5 to 6 months old, they
slow
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move
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to
lower
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the lower
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river which
are
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fast flowing and by that time smolt reaches to 4-year-old fish. After they grow a little more which is 70 to 76cm, adult
salmon
shift to
open
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sea and by that time they would approximately reach 5 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, cm with synonyms.
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