Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets, many small local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, a plethora of giant stores have gained
dominant
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As a result
, some domestic businesses will lose their profit which will create a multiplier effect which is ceasing economy
of local society. I agree with the previous notion because the dying of Correct article usage
the economy
domestic
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the domestic
economy
can be caused by massive corporations which do monopoly
system. In the following paragraphs, I will detail my perspective.
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a monopoly
To begin
with, a number of shops which operate in the rural area provide multitudinous goods to people who live in that zone. On the other hand
, innumerable companies with countless capital expand massively their range even in suburban location
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As a consequence
of the previous scheme, local shops are not able to exist in view of they face a lack of resources. The mentioned situation will be damaged for villagers because there will be probability
that the enormous business Add an article
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monopoly
schedule which cannot be refused by Correct article usage
a monopoly
the
society. Correct article usage
apply
For instance
, in Indonesia, many traditional sellers face bankrupt
because they cannot survive among companies which control countless capital.
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Furthermore
, the discussed phenomenon can cause social issues. One of many stigmas is suburban people will think that they cannot rule the economy
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As a result
, a large conflict can exist due to
many population
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populations
stand
on the contention that they are ruled economically by other parties. Wrong verb form
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For example
, there were huge riots in Indonesia during
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which
one of many causes was a prejudice that Chinese businessmen ruled Correct pronoun usage
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Indonesian
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the Indonesian
economy
. Obviously, the public policymakers should construct a regulation in order to ensure that village
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the village
economy
cannot be ruled by giant corporations.
To conclude
, I agree that monopoly condition
by large business parties will be detrimental situations for the Fix the agreement mistake
conditions
local
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locals
such
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