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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart depicts the highest spending on travel in 2014 from the top ten
countries
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. Those top ten
countries
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 are China,
United
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the United
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 States, Germany,
United
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the United
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 Kingdom, Singapore, South Korea, Hong Kong, India, Malaysia and Taiwan. China is spending the highest number of money on travelling, which is more than 100
billion
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USD
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.
On the
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 second number is
United
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the United
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 States of America which is spending approximately more than 80
billion
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USD
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. Germany is
also
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 spending the same amount of money as America on travelling which is more than 80
billion
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USD
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. After that comes
United
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the United
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 Kingdom which is spending less than 60
billion
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USD
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. Singapore is spending way less than the top 4
countries
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, but it has almost reached more than 20
billion
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USD
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. South Korea is only spending 20
billion
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USD
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in
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on
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 travelling and
same
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the same
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 for Hong Kong as well.
Countries
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 like India, Malaysia and Taiwan are spending way less
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then
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than
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 20
billion
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USD
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. In conclusion, these
countries
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 are spending
some
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a
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 good amount of money on travelling.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, billion, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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