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The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average daily sales of selected food items at the Brisk Café, by season. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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A glance at the bar chart provided compares the average number of food types sold regularly at the Brisk Cafe in
winter
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 and
summer
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.
Overall
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, it is evident that people buy hot products
such
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 as hot coffee and soup more in
winter
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,
while
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 cold beverages and products are more common in the summertime. With regards to warming food items, hot coffee is the first choice among customers in
winter
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, taking up more than 70
servings
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 a day, compared to 30
servings
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 in
summer
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.During wintertime, people only consume more than double the amount of soup as they do in
summer
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, 50 and 25 a day respectively. Interestingly, people are served the same name of salads in both summertime and
winter
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 at around 25 pieces daily. Turning to refreshing foods, choosing an iced coffee is the most widespread decision, with significantly more
servings
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 in
summer
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 than in
winter
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 on a daily basis(40 in the former and almost none in the latter).There is a slight difference in the number of ice cream
servings
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 for the two reasons, though
summer
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 took the lead accounting for approximately 35 pieces a day.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words winter, summer, servings with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Average daily sales
  • Selected food items
  • Seasonal variation
  • Trends
  • Fluctuations
  • Comparison
  • Preferences
  • Anomalies
  • Promotions
  • Stock adjustment
  • Seasonal influence
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