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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subject like Sciences and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views.

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 the majority of
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 agree that
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 is a significant subject for who would be learned at school.
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, there is a number of
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 who disagree with
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 century no matter what subject that important more Science and technology. In
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 essay, I am going to examine
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 question from both views and give my opinion to discuss the matter. On the other side of the argument, there is a variety of reasons why
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 subject still important for those who will be able to an excellent
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, you might learn whatever is easily learned from
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, anything has a background inside that. If you realize and perceive , you can understand and move forward efficiently more than you did not know anything before. These are reasons why
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 believe that.
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, some
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 may argue that Sciences and Technology are the most important subjects in the future, as you know, Historians told that humanity became a civilisation that has been background in Science and Technology so you can communicate with those who have been in opposite side in the world by you press one click on your telephone. There are many benefits that make you comfortable. For the reasons mentioned above, I personally believe that whether
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 or Science that important for some
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 and maybe not important for some
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 in society. In my opinion , both sides of the argument have merits , you must realize and believe in whatever can make benefit you.
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