In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree whit this opinion?
The convenience of fast
food
to consume and it's
affordable prices have Correct your spelling
its
lead
to the rise of patients diagnosed with Wrong verb form
led
health
issues due to
high
fast Correct article usage
the high
food
consumption rate in some countries. Although
if this
is not stopped there will be a surge of patients with health
problems due to
overconsumption of fast food
, I do not agree on
altering the tax rate for fast Change preposition
with
food
as a solution for this
condition.
To outline the problem, the main factor that lead
to the Change the verb form
leads
health
issues caused by fast food
is due to
the overconsumption and lack of self-restraint of some people. Usually, many of them overconsume because they like the taste as the food
is usually loaded with salt and sugar. This
will lead to an unbalanced nutrition intake especially
for sodium and sugar which causes Add the comma(s)
,especially
the
Correct article usage
apply
health
issues if consumed without proper portioning.
On the other hand
, the distinctive aspect of fast food
is its affordable price which also
enables someone to buy the food
at
Change preposition
in
a
large Correct article usage
apply
quantity
. Fix the agreement mistake
quantities
Although
this
is also
why many less affluent household
will rely on fast Fix the agreement mistake
households
food
as their main source of meal
other than cheap canned goods. Fix the agreement mistake
meals
Hence
, the main reason of
why I disagree Change preposition
apply
on
altering the tax for fast Change preposition
with
food
. Anyone who eats fast food
just because they like the taste will still keep buying them for any price given while
some poor families will suffer as their main source of food
will be too expensive for them to afford.
To conclude
, just because some group
of people are not able to control their appetite for fast Fix the agreement mistake
groups
food
does not mean that it can simply be solved by rising
the taxes. Fast Correct your spelling
raising
food
does not just cater to those who like the taste but also
to the poor family who only can afford them other than getting source
of Add an article
the source
a source
food
from canned meals. This
shows how there is a need for the
governments to come up with other solutions on controlling Correct article usage
apply
the
fast Correct article usage
apply
food
consumption so that everyone can eat fast food
in moderation.Submitted by febrinhidayat on
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