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Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

#people #experimentation #animals #discoveries #experiments #alternatives
Animal testing has been in practice for decades. Even though it's ethically questionable, it has played an irreplaceable role in many scientific discoveries. With the emergence of modern
technology
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 many
alternatives
 have come
into
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 light.
This
 essay will discuss scenarios where experimentation on
animals
 can be justified and
it's
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 effective
alternatives
. Before the invention of
anaesthesia
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 if we look at the process of surgery, it was extremely painful and brutal but
unfortunately
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 there
was
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 no other
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 at that time, when only a painful surgical intervention could save the life of a person.
Similarly
, if we go back in time and ruminate about the contribution of animal testing in the field of medicine we will be able to justify it in some cases. In many
scenarios
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 scientists had to prioritise the lives of humans more than
animals
 in order to save humanity from deadly diseases.
For example
:
ebola
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the ebola
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 vaccine was invented by animal testing. The trial may have caused the
animals
 to go through a painful procedure and many may have died too
nonetheless
 it has saved
lives
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 of countless humans.
On the other hand
, now with the advancement of
technology
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 many
alternatives
 are surfacing. In many
cases
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animals
 don't accurately mimic the response to diseases like humans.
Additionally
, animal testing is time-consuming and often not
cost effective
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. The time that takes to yield results from experimentation on
animals
 makes the process fruitless. The most popular and accurate alternative is human volunteers.
However
,
alternatives
 like 3D modelling, stem cell research, tissue culture,
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 modelling are advanced computer modelling are reliable methods. In conclusion, it can be observed from examples in the past that all animal testing is not bad.
Human
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 race is alive today
as a result
 of experimentation on
animals
. In spite of that, scientists should always consider the moral and ethical perspective and only turn to animal testing as a
last
 resort when
life threatening
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life-threatening
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 situations arise.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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