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Band 3.5

Human society has made great technological progress in the last 100 years. Some people think this also has negative effects on our life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

During the previous century, humanity founded a great technological movement which was criticised by some individuals for its negative effects on our daily
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 at the same time.
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 I still respect their contributions to society, I totally agree that a great negative impact is caused by the development of
technology
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.
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, it is apparent that innovative
technology
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 has altered many aspects of our
life
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 over many years. Automating human work,
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, has been assessed in many restaurants, for now,
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 as
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 restaurant.
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, in the medical field, we can see a clear difference in comparison with the past
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, which
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which
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where
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 now many parts of surgeries can be operated by a robot
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 a high
precise proportion
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Besides
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 that,
unconstraining
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 and misusing
technology
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 greatly
affect
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 our
life
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 negatively.
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, many
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AI
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 platforms have been invented so far
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 Chat GPT is one of the incredible
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technology
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technologies
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 that
become
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have become
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 cheating tools for students and
threatens
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 educators to seek ways to solve. On top of that, it somehow makes students not understand deeply an answer
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 of looking for a quick search, copy and paste. In conclusion, I respect and highly appreciate the efforts of scientists in developing advanced
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technologies
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 to assist humans in life.
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, the dark sides of these technologies should be
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 considered and rules should be
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put in place
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 by relevant authorities to
reduce
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minimise
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 as much as possible the risks that we have to take.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly relates to the main idea and supports it well.
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Provide more examples or details to explain your main points.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer connections between sentences and ideas to improve flow.
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The introduction presents a clear opinion on the topic.
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You provided specific examples of technology's impact, like medical robots.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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