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Life nowadays is generally much more stressful than in the past. Give some reasons why people suffer from stress nowadays and what they can do to reduce it.

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The world today is shifting towards advancement and globalization,
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 concept from our society there has been an immense lifestyle change which is observed in today's generation. A considerable number of people community are hard-working and ambitious,
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 to achieve their targets they have unconsciously adopted a stressful environment. In
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 concerning issue of stress and will suggest a plethora of methods to overcome
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 in our country creates a sense of competition amongst the students.
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, from childhood itself, one develops a sense of competition.
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 of which, they feel unwanted pressure on them. To support the statement, I would want to highlight that we notice the need for
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 the students to cope with the situation.
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, with modernization, we are lured by the luxury lifestyle to be able to afford the lavish customs an individual tends to work beyond their capabilities. Probing ahead, it is widely acknowledged that in order to attain financial stability we oversee our passion and opt for a career
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 the expectations from society that adds to the tensions.
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, there is a certain section of our society that has successfully dealt with the problem by pursuing their lives with simplicity. In my opinion, an individual should definitely spend time to self-introspect and meditate so that he/she has a clear vision of life.
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, stress is widely associated with residents of metropolitan cities.
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, their employers should organize campaigns to educate the staff to release trauma. The work-life balance has an imperative role to play
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 one should aim to attain the same in order to have a peaceful time with the family.
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, I want want to emphasize that we should aim to maintain a balance to be peaceful and focused on our desired goal.
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 we should aim at creating route maps for the smooth functioning of life.
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