The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
This
charts
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chart
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shows about
percentage
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the percentage
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of
households
with electrical appliances and
Number
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the Number
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of
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the hour
an hour
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hour
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hours
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at
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of
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housework per
week
, per household between 1920 and 2019. In the first chart washing machine.
Refrigerator
.
Vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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all rise from 1920 to 2019.
Refrigerator
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Refrigerators
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and
Vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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increase
faster than washing
machine
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machines
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. In 1920,
Refrigerator
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the Refrigerator
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just
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had just
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zero
percentage
of
households
and
Refrigerator
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the Refrigerator
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is 30
percentage
of
households
, but in 2019 they all
increase
100
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by 100
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percentage
of
household
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households
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. Washing machine is to
percantage
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percentage
of
households
in 1920,
however
in 2019 is just
increase
about
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by about
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15
percantage
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percentage
at
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in
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households
, and washing
mashine
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machine
is
overed
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covered
by
Pefrigerator
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Refrigerator
and
Vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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in 1940 and 1960.
Vacuum
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The vacuum
A vacuum
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cleaner is
overed
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covered
by
Pefrigerator
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Refrigerator
in 1942. In the second chart Houses per
week
is 50
Number
of hours per
week
, but it decline to 10
Number
of hours per
week
in 2019. Over
than
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then
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,
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the percentang
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percentang
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percentage
of
households
with
electical
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electrical
appliance
increase
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increased
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however
Number
of hours per
week
decline
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declined
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from 1920 to 2019. bu
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, households, number, week, refrigerator, vacuum, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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