The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles.
The chart illustrates the steps of recycling
of
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plastic
bottles from start to end.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there are 9 stages of
recycling
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the recycling
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process beginning
from
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employee
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collect
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the garbage of
plastic
from
container
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and the final
stage
to convert
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the
plastic
waste
to raw materials.
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with
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recycling process, the first
stage
worker
collect
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the
plastic
waste
from the container.
Secondly
, the worker put the
plastic
waste
into the truck in
order
to ship
to
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the recycling
center
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. The next step,
the
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employee
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work in
order
to sort
plastic
waste
. After that, all
plastic
waste
comperssing
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compressing
into one
blocks
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. The fifth
stage
,
the
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plastics
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blocks put on
machine
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in
order
to crush and
then
convert it to grains and wash
this
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grains.
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,
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six
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step, the plastics grains enter in
order
to produce the
plastic
pellets.
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next step, the pellets enter
heating
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process to transfer
it
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to raw material. The
eight
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stage
raw material
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already
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to use again.
Finally
, the
the
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recycle
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plastic
will become ready to use in different
froms
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forms
for expect customers.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, stage, waste, order with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • recycling
  • mitigate
  • environmental impact
  • landfills
  • conservation
  • sorted
  • residual waste
  • adhesives
  • shredded
  • pellets
  • manufacturing
  • ecological
  • economical
  • sustainable
  • automation
  • raw material
  • life cycle
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