the pie charts below compare the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001

the pie charts below compare the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001
IELTS Writing Task Chart for the pie charts below compare the changes in annual spending by a particular UK school in 1981, 1991 and 2001
The two pie charts illustrate the comparison between
yearly
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the yearly
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expenditures
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of British schools in the years 1981,1991 and 2001.
Overall
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, in all three
years
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,years
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the biggest amount of money was spent on teacher's
salaries
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,
while
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the least sector of
expenditures
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was insurance. In 1981 the biggest part of spending was teachers' wages with a figure of 40%. At the same time, other
worker's
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workers'
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salaries
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comprised almost a third of all
expenditures
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in the UK.
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, furniture and equipment and resources
such
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as books share the same proportion of 15 per cent each. In 1991 payments for educational workers consisted
a
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of
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half of annual spending,
while
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other worker's
salaries
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accounted for 22%. Resources
consistedof
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consisted of
consisted
a fifth of all
expenditures
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. Furniture and equipment took 15% and the least sector of spending was insurance with a 3 per cent share. In 2001, the amount of spending on teacher's
salaries
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fall down by 5% compared with the previous decade. During the same year,
furniture
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the furniture
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and equipment sector peaked at 23% and showed the highest value from 1981.
Salaries
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for other workers stood at the figure of 9% and was the lowest during the given period. Total school spendings on insurance were the highest in 30 years and reached 8%. Total
expenditures
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for resources
consistedof
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consisted of
9 per cent and showed a downtrend compared with 1991.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditures, salaries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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