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Some people think the best way to solve global environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #cost #fuel
At one point in time, the government tried to solve global environmental problems by way of increasing the cost of diesel and petrol.
While
 some people argue that it is an efficient way to solve environmental
issues
, I believe
this
 effort is not the best solution for the environmental problem based on the following reasons.
Firstly
, increasing fuel costs is not an efficient way to combat environmental pollution.
This
 is because, by increasing the costs of fuel, people still be able to choose other means of
transportations
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 to travel
such
 as trains and buses. It doesn’t deter or decrease the use of transportation which ultimately will still contribute to pollution.
On the other hand
, there are other ways that can contribute to resolving the
issues
. One of the solutions is to increase taxes for
oil
 and gas companies for drilling
oil
. With the increment of taxes, it will leave the company with no choice but to shut down drilling projects and stop any
oil
productions
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.
Secondly
, the government can work on providing incentives for the companies
who
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 contribute to renewable
resources
 spending. By providing
the
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incentives on the
company
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 annual spending, the company will start exploring other options
such
 as renewable or waste-based energy.
For instance
,
organisation
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 like Woodside has started to move away from
oil
 and gas drilling to renewable energy and
resources
 projects after the Australian Government announced the incentive for companies who promote renewable
resources
 spending. In conclusion, I reiterate my statement above and disagree that increasing
oil
 prices is the best solution to solve environmental
issues
. I believe there are other alternatives
such
 as increasing taxes for
oil
productions
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 and giving out incentives for renewable energy and
resources
 to deal with the
issues
.
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