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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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 time ago, having Indian spices in other nations was a rare thing.
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, now we live in a
world
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 where
people
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 can go to a market and purchase
food
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 manufactured worldwide. I believe that
this
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food
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 network in supermarkets is a positive development because of the increase in quality and
variety
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.
Food
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 produced across the
world
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 will increase
food
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 quality in supermarkets. The percentage of individuals around the
world
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that
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 suffer from
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 poisoning is not low. When it comes to Third
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countries
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,
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, they may not have the standards of
food
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, which makes it unfair for
people
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 living in
such
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countries
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.
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,
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 enhancement will, in my opinion, decrease the proportion of individuals
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 get
food
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 poisoning because of the worldwide policies that are set for
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 being transported. Different
food
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 from all over the
world
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 will add
variety
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 and a sense of belonging for
people
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 living outside their home
countries
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. Many
people
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 nowadays do not like the idea of eating the same kinds of
food
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 every day, so the fact that
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 would be introduced
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 of the diversity of production will be admirable for a lot.
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, most of the
countries
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 around the globe have different residents of different nationalities.
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, having choices from their own
countries
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 will make them more comfortable and
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feeling
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a feeling
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 of nostalgia
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 their hometown. In conclusion, the diversity of
food
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 items in supermarkets is a useful advancement because of the great
variety
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 and quality it brings. Growths like these should not stop but rather continue to make
countries
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 more united and aim for a better
world
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.

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task achievement
Consider including more specific examples to illustrate your points in each paragraph. This will strengthen your argument and make it more tangible for the reader.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that there is a clear relationship between the points you make and the examples you use. This will improve the logical flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the discussion on the globalization of food products in supermarkets.
coherence cohesion
Your writing has a good logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on a separate reason why this development is positive.
task achievement
You have effectively addressed the task by discussing both the quality and variety aspects of worldwide food products.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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