We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is true that many
people
living under living
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a living
needs
our help worldwide nowadays. Some Correct subject-verb agreement
need
people
believe that we had better to
give a hand to our nearby communities and own country rather than taking care of someone residing in Remove the marker
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other
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another country
countries
. In my opinion, I think we should take care of everyone if we can give a
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support
regardless of their location.
Needless to say, it is very seldom to witness anyone ignore the people
that needed support
from neighbouring to other provinces' fellowship. Whenever people
notice about
any poorer Change preposition
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people
suffering from their survival domestically, for example
, they definitely raise the charity fund and share it
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to
the Change preposition
with
needed
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people
for their recover
. Many poor severe patients have recovered and returned to their daily life thanks to Replace the word
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such
kind of support
. The more we give out, the more people
are being helped.
It is even more better if we can help someone from very
far distant location or even from different geography, Add an article
a very
particullarly
those developed Correct your spelling
particularly
countries
supporting those developing countries
. In the modern days, we have seen a lot of aids
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aid
UK
or Europe to the poverty in Africa regarding Correct article usage
the UK
to
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issue
. They cannot ignore the dire need that African Fix the agreement mistake
issues
people
cannot afford such
as food and vaccines which are no longer an issue in those rich countries
. It is recorded that over the past few decades, due to
the support
from 1st world countries
, many lives have been saved in Africa. Thus
, supporting borderless is much more important than anything else.
In conclusion, if we only support
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people
, then
it may only help the domestic people
getting
better, but it does not help to resolve the global issues. The more Wrong verb form
get
people
we can help, the better world we can build.Submitted by nhp2610 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite