Plastic shopping bags are used widely and cause many environmental problems. Some people say they should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a common belief that
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people
are contaminated the natural by using elastic shopping lot in daily life.And it should be stopped to use.From my point of view,I
partically
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particularly
partially
agree with
this
view. On the one hand,
plastic
bags
are
extremly
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extremely
dangerous to human health.Its cause cancer,birth defects in children,and
poisioning
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poisoning
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human.
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who
using
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plastic
bags
a
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long time can
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to liver rot and sickness.For
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according to
the England
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newspaper
newspapers
in 2009,more than 700,000 persons
were
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died because of using
plastic
bags
everyday
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.
Moreover
,most of the earth’s surface is covered with water and when it’s windy, molded
ton
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fly into the water and harm aquatic animals
therefore
banning these
bags
is vital to their survival.
Thus
,the number of mass death of fish increased each year.
On the other hand
,most
people
suggest that paper
bags
and reusable
bags
made from cotton are the best solutions.
However
, these remedies are even worse. Paper
bags
require us to continue cutting forests.
Besides
, reusable
bags
are plagued by similar problems.For
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if
people
decided to
used
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paper
bags
,a lot of trees will be
cutted
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down.
This
would make soil pollution and more natural
disaster
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would happen. To summarize,
although
the
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plastic
bags
are
harmfully
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to
environment
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,the government should not ban
people
using
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it
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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