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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people say that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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A group of thought believes that advertisements play a major role in promoting goods for communities.
However
, others say that these means are becoming well known to the extent that nobody is noticing them. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both these views, and I will mention my way of thinking about
this
 topic. On the one hand, some people think that advertisements subconsciously build trust in certain brands in our minds because we are surrounded by them.
For example
, companies nowadays are using not only street posters but
also
 digital posts that appear on social media and many other websites.
This
 has helped to make people feel more trust toward the promoted brands.
On the other hand
, another way of thinking is suggesting that there is a tremendous amount of marketing in
this
 world both virtual and physical.
For instance
, the highways, and buildings are filled with posters even the internet
such
 as Youtube, Facebook , Instagram and many others are having disturbing marketing content.
This
 content is being ignored by the public. In my opinion,
although
 advertisements are becoming common and annoying sometimes, they serve the great purpose of introducing products to consumers. Those products; customers may have never known about without seeing them on the streets or posted on the internet. I
also
 think that there should be regulations regarding their quantities. Companies can not just post whenever they like without paying attention to their customers' comfort. In conclusion,
while
 It is true that products have to be promoted in order to be bought, moderation in posting
such
 promotions is no less important because though some consumers find those means necessary, others are not even noticing them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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