The map below show the village of skoeford in 1930 and 2010

The map below show the village of skoeford in 1930 and 2010
The two maps illustrate alternations in the layout of the village of Skoeford over the period from 1930 to 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the village has been significantly reconstructed and renovated after forty years,
while
some minor features witnessed no change. Looking at the map in more detail, we can see that all the farmlands and the shops have been removed and replaced by a house where a lot of residents can live in.
Furthermore
, the garden in the eastern part has been reduced its side by half, and
the large houses buildings
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the buildings of the large house
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expanded and reconstructed into retirement home areas for older people. The primary school has been
intacted
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interacted
and added more attachment blocks after that forty years.
Moreover
, the road has more branches with an extra circuit in the eastern part, a longer road leads to the southwest and another leads to the northeast part,
while
a short road has been linked with the retirement home area.
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