The map below show the village of skoeford in 1930 and 2010

The two maps illustrate alternations in the layout of the village of Skoeford over the period from 1930 to 2010.

Overall

, it can be seen that the village has been significantly reconstructed and renovated after forty years,

while

some minor features witnessed no change. Looking at the map in more detail, we can see that all the farmlands and the shops have been removed and replaced by a house where a lot of residents can live in.

Furthermore

, the garden in the eastern part has been reduced its side by half, and

the large houses buildings

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the buildings of the large house

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expanded and reconstructed into retirement home areas for older people. The primary school has been

intacted

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interacted

and added more attachment blocks after that forty years.

Moreover

, the road has more branches with an extra circuit in the eastern part, a longer road leads to the southwest and another leads to the northeast part,

while

a short road has been linked with the retirement home area.

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The map below show the village of skoeford in 1930 and 2010

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both views and give opinions.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are requiered. Discuss both these views and your own opinion.

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A poor infrastructure hinders under developed countries from progressing and modernizing. Some people think this should be the first problem tackled by foreign aid. To what extent do you agree?