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You recently ate at a restaurant. When you got home, you realized you had left your jacket behind. Write a letter to the restaurant manager. In your letter, • explain how and when you lost your jacket • describe your jacket • say what you would like the manager to do to help you find it

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Dear Sir or Madam, Yesterday I had a delicious dinner at your restaurant, but When I arrived home, I realized that I
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 my jacket in the cloakroom. I left your place at 9 p.m the jacket was there since 5 p.m after the waiter offered to take it from me. The jacket is black in colour with a blue logo of a pigeon on the front pocket. The logo is quite small so you will have to gaze a bit to be able to see it. I am sure you will be able to distinguish it easily because the inner side of it is red in colour. I am asking you kindly to send it to my address in London. I will pay for the delivery cost. Please bear in mind that I am available from 6pm to 11pm. Any time within
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. Yours faithfully, John Walker.
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greeting and closing
Provide a more formal salutation such as 'Dear Manager' instead of 'Dear Sir or Madam'
single idea per paragraph
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea for better organization of information

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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