The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.

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The given diagram highlights the process by which chocolate is produced. There are ten steps in the process, from picking pods to pressing material with the aim to produce chocolate.

The first step is

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that the cacao tree is grown in three countries in the names of South America, Africa and

also

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Indonesia. After being grown adequately white cacao

beans

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are harvested by farmers. The second step is that

Beans

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are fermented

due to

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make them spread in the Sun to dry.

Following

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this

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, once it is dried, it is

then

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put in huge socks. The next category is that Heavy sacks are transported by a train or a lorry in order to take them to the factory where

Beans

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are roasted at a really high temperature which is 360 degrees in a special gadget

looks

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that looks

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like a Microwave after which

Beans

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are crushed owing to removing outer Shell. From the inner part.

Subsequently

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, the inner part has been pressed until liquid chocolate is produced and can be consumed by its buffs

accordingly

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

173 words

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The diagram shows how chocolate is produced.

The importance of biodiversity is being recognized as in creasing number of species. Why is special loss occurring? What are the potential effects of this?

In some countries, the number of shooting massacres is on the rise because many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

in some countries, the cost livig rapidly increasing. what do you think may be the reasons for this? what effects might this have on society?

Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and this money could be better spent eleswhere. To what extent do you agree or disagree?