It is important for people to take risks , both in their professional lives and their personal lives . do you think the advantages of taking risks out weigh the disadvatages ?

There is no perfect
life
without
risk
.
Risk taking
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is a crucial part of human lives for their
further
growth
I
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in
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business
life
as well as
private
life
.
Firstly
, taking
risk
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can help
ones
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one's
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life
career
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and career
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goals .
for instance
, an office with 50
workers
would take
everyday
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a
risk
to grow
his
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business
.
Its
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an essential part of their
businesss
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business
businesses
to think about
further
growth of their
business
as well as
their
workers
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worker's
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future.
Whereas
workers
could gain more knowledge and experience and the owner
gain
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more profits. In
personal
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our personal
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life
in our
day to day
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day-to-day
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life
without ups and downs
their
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isn’t a
spice up
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in our
life
. A baby without falling cannot learn to walk same as that in each stage of our
life
there is a
risk
.
Secondly
,
risk
can
also
bring anxiety and
fear
of
future
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. A person would think of his
business
life
lost and profit. He fears more about
fear
of his
business
what if I take
this
risk
.
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Where as
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workers
also
would
fear
to give
his
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their
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ideas .
a
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parent would
fear
to let their baby
to
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walk where he/she falls and
get
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gets
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hurt.
Like wise
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a couple would
fear
of
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apply
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divorce. In conclusion , taking
risk
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risks
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is a essential part of human
being
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beings
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to overcome the
fear
of
future
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the future
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take
risk
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risks
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and start the adventures
life
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of life
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ride without
fear
.
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