In many families nowadays, both parents work and pay people to look after their children. Some people believe this is not good for families. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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The pressures of modern life mean that in many families both the mother and father have jobs

while

the

children

spend

time

childcare

. Some individuals believe

this

has

a negative effects

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a negative effect

negative effects

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on family life.

This

essay will argue that

although

this

situation may place pressure on people ,

overall

it results in more advantages than disadvantages. Some people believe that paying people to look after your

children

has a negative impact.

Firstly

, many feel that

children

should spend more

time

with their family because the relationship is closer and more loving than with a career.

Secondly

, others argue that

children

need to relax at home rather than be in a stressful

childcare

environment.

For example

, there might be bullying that a child has to deal with.

lastly

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Lastly

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, many think that the extra cost of

childcare

means that having a second salary provides few benefits.

However

, just because

a stays

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a stay

stays

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at home with the

children

, it does not necessarily mean that they will use the

time

to develop family relationships. Constantly caring for

children

can , in fact , cause strain.

Besides

, there are many benefits to

children

being looked after in paid care.

For instance

, nowadays

children

do not socialise with each other as much as in the past.

Childcare

gives more opportunities for

this

to happen.

Secondly

childcare

can provide lots more opportunities to do different things not available at home ,

such

as playing team sports.

Lastly

, parents who use

childcare

may have more energy when they play with their

children

at the weekends and a little extra money to pay for holidays. In conclusion , I believe that it is the quality of

time

spent with

children

that is

important , not the quantity. Provided parents choose

childcare

providers wisely ,

children

can have more varied and higher quality life

experience

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experiences

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if both parents work.

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In many families nowadays, both parents work and pay people to look after their children. Some people believe this is not good for families. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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