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Life nowadays is generally more stressful than in the past. Give some reasons why people suffer more from stress nowadays, and say what they can do to reduce it.

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There has been a significant change in the community
due to
 tension and problems. Earlier,
life
 was stress-free,
people
 always lived a
life
 without any burdens and enjoyed most of the
time
 with their families. In these looming paragraphs, I will discuss the major reasons behind
this
 cause and suggest some ways to reduce it. To commence with, more than 90% of the population are working in a 9 to 5 job, so the schedule is soo much tight that parents do not even get enough
time
 to spend with their children.
Additionally
, year-on-year
inflation
 is increasing significantly, as a matter of ,fact thousands of
people
 either have lost their jobs or working extra hours to manage finances and because of
this
 reason family members who are earning to manage everything are stressed and not able to spend
time
 with their loved ones.
Moreover
, mobile phones can
also
 be the second problem,
according to
 research
people
 who have more than 8 hours of screen
time
 can get affected by the dangerous blue radiation,
due to
 which most of the
time
 an individual always remains in stress, and have continuous headache problem.
In contrast
 to the above ,situation the government should come up with some new plans to
setup
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 manufacturing industries and launch new schemes which provide funding to the
people
 of the country, because of
this
 initiative new jobs will be introduced to them and so many of them can start their own business, which
as a result
 helps to boost the economy of their country and automatically the rate of
inflation
 can come down and
people
 can easily manage their finances and spend
life
 peacefully with their family.
Furthermore
, there is no solution for a 9 to 5 job, each member of all families should sit together every day for one or two hours daily and talk, sharing what happened in their
life
 today.
Therefore
,
this
 is the best solution which will help them to come out from stress. In a nutshell, it is well known that
life
 is very hectic because of workload and
inflation
. As compared to previous times,
people
 now value money rather than
life
 and because of
inflation
 and workload, individuals hardly get
time
 to spend with their loved ones and
that is
 the major cause of
people
 being so stressed. The government focus on increasing jobs and should start some schemes for the community, so that rate of
inflation
 goes down and
people
 can live
life
 peacefully.
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