Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opionion. Write at least 250 words.

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In the modern world, business owners tirelessly try to introduce their products to the community. Some think that advertisement is the best platform to make people interested in the goods.
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argue with that by saying that it's a waste of time since most individuals do not pay much attention to those things anymore. In my opinion, it will
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on the types of platforms and the locations.
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, specifying the goods and the target buyers would
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be beneficial.
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, I would have to agree with the former view. Glancing through advertisements has become common in our daily lives. It is understandable that we do not
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much attention to those anymore, especially if the advertisement is not relevant to our interests.
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, I believe that most of us do not really read the commercials that are stuck on the billboards on the tolls
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high speeds unless they are stuck in traffic. 
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, people tend to go to the toilet during commercial breaks when they watch Television.
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, nowadays, the platform to put a commercial has been highly developed. In recent times, technologies read our searched histories like a book, they
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being processed and the advertisements are selected based on our interests.
Due to
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that, we are constantly looking at commercials when we scroll through our social media and surf the internet.
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, when we are studying for an IELTS exam, the advertisements start to offer us many interesting discounts that are hard to decline.
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it is true that we do not
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much attention on the old fashion commercials, the same thing can not be said about the current trend in advertising. In my opinion, advertisement is still a good marketing strategy to
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someone to buy goods.
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task response
The essay addresses the prompt by discussing both views, but the opinion is not fully developed. Consider providing stronger support for your opinion and addressing the opposing view more comprehensively.
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