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The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reposting the min features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habit in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reposting the min features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart compares the number of citizen’s
habits
 in
term
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terms
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 of buying and drinking both
coffee
 and tea in five
cities
 in Australia for the
last
 4 weeks. The unit of measurement is in percentage. 
Overall
, the figures for
five
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the five
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cities
 have varieties of lifestyles. The
habits
 of people in all regions that went to the café to buy
coffee
 and tea in the
last
 4 weeks is higher than to buy
instant
coffee
 and fresh
coffee
, except
Adelaide
. In all regions, buying fresh
coffee
 is the lowest percentage.  As the graph shows, approximately 60% to 65% of
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the populations
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populations
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population
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 in Melbourne, Hobart and Sydney
habits
 went to a café to buy
coffee
, compared to
Adelaide
 only about 49%
that
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apply
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buy
instant
coffee
 is a great number in
this
 city. The
proportions
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proportion
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 of people who buy
instant
coffee
 is the second highest, with some
cities
such
 as Brisbane, Melbourne and Sydney around 45% to 55%. The figures for buying
coffee
is
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are
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 the lowest in all
cities
, Sydney and Melbourne
around
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at around
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 40%, Hobart’s habit is approximately 35% and
follow
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followed
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 by Brisbane and
Adelaide
almost
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at almost
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 35%.  In summary,
number
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a number
the number
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 of
habits
 percentage that went to
the
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apply
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coffee
 is higher in all
cities
 than
Adelaide
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in Adelaide
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, which buying
instant
coffee
 is the bigger rate
at
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of
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 50%. In
last
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the last
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 4 weeks, buying
coffee
 has been the lowest in five
cities
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words habits, coffee, cities, instant, adelaide with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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