The chart below shows the preferred method of communication for 18–30 years old in three different years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the  preferred method of communication for 18–30 years old in three different years.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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chart compares the
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system of communication for 18
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30 years old between 1996 and 2016. The unit of measurement is in proportion.
Overall
, the percentage of landlines rapidly decreased over the period,
while
the proportion of mobile
phone
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phones
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or apps and social
media
rose each time.
However
,
the
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mobile phone shows
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rose significantly
than
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the
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social
media
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gradually. In 1996, approximately 66%
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of landline
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landline
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landlines
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was the highest percentage of that method in communication.
However
, in 2006 it declined to around 26%
,
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and plunged to around 5% in 2016. Mobile
phone
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phones
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or apps climbed significantly
that
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in 1996
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around 6% and went up approximately 42%. In 2016 the growth was 62%. The figures for social
media
shows
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that in 1996 around 7%, and it went up to about 43% in 2006
,
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and rose near 62%.
At the end
of the period, the figures that show
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methods were mobile phones or apps, followed by social
media
, and the
last
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a landline
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landline
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landlines
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words media with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.

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