In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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population
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the population
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in
few
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a few
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countries
opine
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that
,
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spending
huge
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a huge
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number of money on developing new
railways
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railway
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lines for speedy trains
while
some
people
thinks
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every sector of
communication
should be updated for the advantage of using
varies
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transport
.
Otherwise
using
one
medium of
communication
will be
burden
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a burden
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and feel crowded for passengers. In my opinion,
government
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the government
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should improve all types of public
transport
.
Firstly
, in
this
era of modern technology,
people
have the opportunity to
use
different kinds of
vehicle
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vehicles
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. Like
bus
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buses
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, metro rail,
subway
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subways
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,
ship
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ships
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,
plane
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planes
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, auto
rickshaw
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rickshaws
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,
taxi
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taxis
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and so on. Somehow if there
is
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any difficulties with
bus
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the bus
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system citizens can
use
subway
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the subway
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or
taxi
or any other motor
vehicles
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vehicle
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. A developing country like Bangladesh is using currently metro rail. So,
people
can
experienced
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different means of
communication
. Which increased a country's impressions
to
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other countries. Namely, in China bullet
train
is very popular.
However
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they
also
have air-plane and other
trasport
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transport
. My brother was in China. He has a meeting with his
deligates
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delegates
. The day he had
meeting
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a meeting
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,
bullet
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the bullet
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train
service was closed for mechanical upgradation. His plan was to
use
bullet
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train
to reach his destination.
Although
he could not
use
because
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it because
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of the problem.
Therefore
he had to go to the meeting via
taxi
. So he
get
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the benefit of having multiple choices of
communication
.
Secondly
, if
nation
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the nation
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only
focus
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focuses
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on railway improvement
then
people
will only have
one
option for daily
trasportation
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transportation
. That will create pressure on
one
vehicle system.
In addition
, railway lines have limitations. They can not be
in
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apply
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every where
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everywhere
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. What if in some places railway track can not
be place
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. That place will be disattached from the other cities.
For instance
, my colleague
wanted
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go to his hometown "Ishwardi" via
train
to celebrate
Eid
. As in the vacation of
Eid
everyone wants to go to their hometown, so
train
tickets were all sold. He was very upset, as there
wasn't
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any
bus
or
taxi
facilities in "Ishwardi".
Then
few of his friends before
one
day
of
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after
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Eid
hired a
bus
from Dhaka to Ishwardi. So he
team
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up with them. And
finally
, he had
chance
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a chance
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to
spent
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his
Eid
happiness with his family. So, having and improving only
one
communication
channel
not
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is not
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enough. On the basis of
above
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discussion, I believe
improvement
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the improvement
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of all the existing
communication
medium
are
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is
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necessary.
Thus
gives the option of having
muliple
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multiple
transport
facilities. And it will not create
extra
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an extra
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burden on
one
motor vehicle or
one
medium of
transport
system.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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