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Some people think that what chiinfluenceldren watch on television will their behavior. Others think that the time they watch television influences their behavior most .Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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it is undeniable that
time
 and what children watch on television will affect their attitude. As a matter of fact, television is one of the most effective technologies which is a two-edged sword. It is Either improving your attitude or either decreasing it.
firstly
, research has shown that offspring learning from
TV
 with
parents
' control in selecting specific subjects are more educated than ones choosing random channels.
For instance
, boys and girls watching cartoons are quieter and are better at multitasking,
while
 others who are watching random channels are more confused and less talkative.
For
example
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 manage free
time
 for kids to watch and select their favourite episode that was chosen by
parents
. Fathers and mothers must be mentors for their kids, after all raising offspring reflects
parents
' behaviour too.
secondly
, consuming more
time
 sitting in front of the
TV
 could be harmful to under-age kids
due to
 causing overweight problems and backache.
Furthermore
,
TV
 set addiction is a result of not moving, selecting one path of life routine, and having less number of relationships which kills childhood moments. As
such
, the way humans will grow up after they decide to choose sitting and watching television for a long period leads to the next generation presenting with bad habits. In my opinion, fathers and mothers must take care of their children by teaching and leading them to the right path.
Also
, they should select specific movies and shows that provide useful information. ln conclusion, children watching
TV
 and spending a lot of
time
 in front of it will influence their behaviour when there is a lack of supervision from the
parents
.
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