In many countries paying for things using mobile phones (cell phone ) apps is becoming incresingly common . Does this development have more advantages or disavantages ?

Nowadays, in a wide variety
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folk prefer to pay for things by mobile phones application
instead
of
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type of that.
Although
there are some positive points for
this
happening, in my personal opinion the negative aspects of that
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are far more. In
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phenomenon in
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era.
Firstly
the number of commute
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for paying things because most
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the client
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would rather use that apps and
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their bills easily from their accommodation
instead
going to the branch.
Additionally
,
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highly beneficial for
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.
Due to
the
last
research in India, the amount of traffic congestion drop off because most
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people are willing to stay at home and complete their payments from their residences.
Hence
, from the environmental viewpoint, the amount of exhaust gas and fossil fuel decline significantly in the long run.
On the other hand
,
this
method has some drawbacks.
Firstly
, most of the older generation are unable to use that equipment as
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they don’t have enough knowledge for paying with in
this
way.
Also
, there are several developing countries which do not have a basic infrastructure
consequently
, it is not valid for some regions.
For example
, in some parts of India, some citizens are unable to success the internet.
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, the administration authorities consider several security layouts
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prevent criminal behaviour ,
while
there are plenty of cyber crimes
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that way. In regards
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statistics in the UK, there are more than 10000 hacks per month
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some of them were successful. In conclusion,
however
, there are some merits
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paying things by apps,
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drawbacks of them are remarkable. In
this
era,
due to
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essential infrastructure, we must prevent the consumption of them
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