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The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the Internet.

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the Internet.
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The graph reveals the repetition of downloading three different applications each
week
 during a five-
week
 period.
Overall
, as can be vividly seen from the bar chart,
although
 all given packages underwent an upward trend, the only one that climbed steadily and without any variation was Java.
Moreover
, the highest number of downloading over the period given belonged to ActiveX,
whereas
 the lowest number was allocated to Net. As illustrated by the graph, from
week
 1 to
week
 3, the figures for ActiveX and Java increased gradually, from about 70,000 to 110,000 and just over 40,000 to 60,000, respectively.
However
,
Net
Correct article usage
the Net
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 witnessed an opposite pattern and fell enormously from 35,000 to nearly 10,000.
By contrast
, between
week
 3 and
week
 5, all applications experienced a substantial jump. More precisely, the figures for
Net
Correct article usage
the Net
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 grew drastically to almost 50,000. The same pattern transpired for Java, and the numbers increased by around one-half to just over 80,000. ActiveX,
on the other hand
, underwent a considerable decline before jumping tremendously to nearly 121,000.
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