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A longer prison term as a way of punishing those who break the law is not as good as other methods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It has been argued locking
criminals
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 for a long
time
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 is a good method, and in my opinion, I agree that simply applying long-term custody to law-breakers is not a good way. There is no doubt that positive effects come with applying longer
prison
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 terms.
To begin
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 with,
criminals
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 will have an improved understanding of their crime, because they have to stay in jail for a longer
time
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, which means that probably those people will accept more education about the law and have more
time
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 to double-think about their faults, leading to more comprehensive awareness and understanding, eventually result in reduced probability for them to break the law again.
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,
criminals
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 are
also
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 able to be cut off from their old way of living by increasing
prison
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 terms. Since skill training is common in
prison
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 education,
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 those who break the law will have more chance to acquire certain skills for independent living,
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 once they are released after serving a sentence, it is more likely for them to find a proper job, resulting in an independent life without committing crimes.
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, there are detrimental consequences arising from increasing sentence-serving
time
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. Obviously, it lacks deterrent power for those people who committed heavy crimes, because those
criminals
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 are usually anti-social and do not care about the surrounding people, conventional in-
prison
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 education is effectless, and usually ignored by them.
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, it is almost for sure that they will continue making crimes after being released.
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, in countries like Sweden, some serial killers were sent back soon again
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 murder after they ended the previous custodies.
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, locking
criminals
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 for a long
time
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 is a waste of public resources. The government has to spend taxes on maintenance and keep the
criminals
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 alive,
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 it will be a huge burden if they have to stay locked for a longer
time
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, leading to reduced investigation on other public facilities.
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, there are significant drawbacks if they are in
prison
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 longer, and the drawbacks outweigh the benefits.
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, I strongly agree with
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 viewpoint.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rehabilitation programs
  • community service
  • reintegration
  • consequences
  • restorative justice
  • reconcile
  • deterrence
  • recidivism
  • cost-effective
  • public safety
  • offender
  • criminal behavior
  • root causes
  • reintegrate
  • sentencing
  • constructive
  • economic costs
  • short term
  • preventing future crimes
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