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The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph gives information about the age of the population of Iceland between 1990 and 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Bar chart compares the percentage of
populace
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the populace
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 for different 5
age
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 groups in Iceland from the
year
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 1990 to the
year
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 2020. The
age
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 groups are accounted from newborn to over 65.
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, it can be seen that
people
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 of
age
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 between 25-54 were hit the highest percentage in all given years, mostly above 30%. The
age
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 group of 55-64 and 65 and above showed a stable percentage
overall
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 between 10% to 15% approximately. In terms of young
people
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 from 25 to 54, a continued growth has been observed from 2019 to 2020, which started at around 30% in 1990 and with a slight increase hit almost 50% of the total population of
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Iceland.
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, the
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 of the
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 group 60 and over showed a stable population, by nearly 10% in the first two decades,and
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small fluctuations in the next two decades with little increase in the
year
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 2010 and a decline in the next decade. On the
,
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whole it was noticed between the range of 10% to 15%.
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, the Group of
people
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 with
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 55 to 64, represented the decline, as it started at around 12% in 1990, which dropped by 1% in the
year
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 2000, but remain steady in the next decade, and reached exactly 10% in 2020.
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, a continuous decline has been observed in the remaining groups(15-24 and 0 to 14). In the
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 1990, youngsters under 24 and 0-14 were counted at around 21% and 25% respectively, which got decreased by 1% after 10 years. In the
year
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 2020, the population of
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 15-24 dropped by more than double from the
year
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 1990.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, year, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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