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Some believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#believe #money #education #computers #teachers
Nowadays it has been
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 that some revolutionary changes
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 happened in our educational system.People spent
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 amount of their income to
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 the requirements of their
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 education purpose. Many people think that
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 it is necessary to
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 cash on personal computers and
on the other hand
 some believe to spent with their
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tutors
.I will discuss my
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 regarding
this
 subject in the following paragraphs. As mentioned earlier, information technology has a great impact on the education system.Computers and associated gadgets are beneficial for
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school assignments,project works and presentations.
Moreover
, it allows
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 to access any kind of information,at
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 a single touch.
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,in
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 recent survey showed
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a hike in
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 of
students
 using systems and thereby,
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percentage
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 increase in their
overall
 success.So it is comprehensive that spending money on
computer
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computers
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 and other
softwares
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software
 can be advantageous to our educational achievements. In
contraray
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contrast
, the efforts of
teachers
 should be appreciated.
In addition
,they play a vital role in shaping the
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 future and their support to acquire knowledge is highly demanding.Compared with previous years,tutors are getting
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marginalised
.To illustrate
this
, in 2023 ,12000
teachers
 lost their jobs as the new invention replace the
teachers
.
Hence
, funding for their growth could be indebted to enhance their
overall
 growth. In my
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 both of them are essential for the
students
 to their physical and mental development.When
teachers
 help them to provide mental strength with the knowledge their
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 can be solved by
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artificial intelligence.So it is important to keep them both for
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 successful career.
To sum up
, spending money will be beneficial regardless,
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it's
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with
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computer
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computers
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 or with the
teachers
.Rules
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 to
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 as our country grows, so the government has to make some
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initiative
 steps to develop the education system in a better way to nurture
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innovative
students
,thereby a great future.
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