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Government spending on restoration of old buildings in cities should be stopped. Instead they should spend the money for housing and road development. Do you agree or disagree?

#government #restoration #buildings #cities #money #road #development
Some people believe that we should not spend any money
in
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the restoratuion
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restoratuion
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restoration
restorations
 of
original
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buidings bacause
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buildings because
 it is not
worh
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worth
 it,and spend
in
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 new
residental
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residential
building
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buildings
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 and
road
expanxion
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expansion
expansions
.In my view,new homes and
road
 development are
impornant
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important
,
while
 restoration
original
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building
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buildings
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also
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 essential if
it
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they
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 can be restored. On the one hand,
latest
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 surveys show that the demand for homes is on the rise
due to
 the growing population.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
,spending money
in
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residental
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residential
building
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buildings
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 will make people
more
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safer as they have
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advance
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 security system in place.
Additionally
,enough
home
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homes
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 can improve health
standard
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standards
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bacause
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because
 people who
staying
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 on
street
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the street
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 will spread illness,and it will strain on
healthcare
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the healthcare
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 system.
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,in the slum area hospital is always fulfil with patients and
disease
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 source is from
street
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.
Besides
 that,
road
 development should
also
 be a priority of the
gorverment
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government
.The poor condition of the
road
are
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 the main
causes
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cause
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 of
trafic
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traffic
jam
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.We can improve
condition
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 of
road
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 by expanding
road
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 and
well
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 planned.
On the other hand
,restoring original
builidng
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building
buildings
such
 as some historical building bring a lot of benefits in economic.
In other words
,historical
building
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buildings
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 can attract some
tourisms
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to
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visit and it will lead
the
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 development of
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the economic
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economic
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 in
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the surounding
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surounding
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surrounding
 area. Malacca is a good and
sucessful
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successful
 example
for
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this
.
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,Malacca will be the first choice in international tourism
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that
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 who travel to Malaysia because there have a lot of
building
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buildings
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 relevant
our
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 culture and history.
To
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 conclusion,new
residental
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residential
 building and
road
expanxion
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expansion
 is necessary but can’t
igonore
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ignore
importance
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the importance
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 of restoring
building
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the building
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.The most effective way is
consider
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 both and make
good
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balancing
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.
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  • historic
  • heritage
  • preservation
  • conservation
  • restoration
  • urban development
  • housing
  • road infrastructure
  • tourism
  • revenue
  • community
  • identity
  • property values
  • craftsmanship
  • architectural styles
  • job creation
  • economic growth
  • compromise
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