In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast foods. This has a negative impact on families, individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
in some countries, cuisine is being converted to junk food.
This
has caused an adverse influence on families, personalities and communities. Linking Words
this
writer firmly contends that convenience fare will replace regular foodstuff in the near future.
first of all, junk bread is very convenient and easy to buy Linking Words
due to
it appearing around residents' areas. Linking Words
instead
of making and cooking the historic meal, it would waste a lot of time and sometimes it is not suitable for people's taste and smell especially the youngth. Linking Words
On the other hand
, if consumers do not like to cook or do not have time, they can click on their smartphones and the snack is shipping to their homes right now. Linking Words
For instance
, nowadays, teens who are very unavailable or lazy, just stay at home and wait for their meal, they just open the cooking apps and buy cuisine online. so, regular drinks have become less common in the modern era , especially the teens.
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secondly
, because of the improvement in the economy and politics, a lot of countries have built up dining rooms that contain fast bread, and Linking Words
as a result
, more and more traditional cafeterias have closed because they do not have consumers. in Vietnam, Linking Words
for example
, there are more than 10000 fast-feed outlets for Vietnamese people to consume and some old coffee shops do not have anyone to come and enjoy. Linking Words
thus
, the government should concentrate on traditional cuisine to protect the old culture.
in conclusion, traditional food needs to be taken care of by the government and residents especially the teens and the young.Linking Words
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Task Response
Ensure each paragraph has a single clear main idea that is fully explored. For instance, detail how fast food convenience impacts family meals and relationships.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on developing clearer topic sentences for each paragraph. It will help present a logical flow of ideas.
Introduction
The introduction presents the main idea clearly and concisely.
Relevant Specific Examples
Relevant examples, like the situation in Vietnam, help ground the essay in reality and provide concrete evidence.
Your opinion
Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.
If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.
Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.
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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?