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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities
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The chart presents data on the underground
railway
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 systems,
such
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 as their opened data and the
kilometres
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 of their route in different cities around the world.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
Tokyo
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 was reaching the highest point of passengers per year,
by contrast
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, Kyoto recorded by far the lowest figures.
London
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 was the oldest
railway
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 and Los Angeles was the newest one. A closer look in more detail,
London
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 was the first
city
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 that opened the underground
railway
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 system in 1863. Following
this
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 was
a
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the
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city
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 of Paris in 1900. Accounts for three
portion
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 was
Tokyo
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 opened in 1927, the next two cities were Washington DC in 1976 and Kyoto in 1981.
Finally
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, there was Los Angeles started opening in 2001.The route from
London
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city
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 peaked at 394
kilometres
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 accounting for the
most
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larger number compared with 199
kilometres
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 of the route in Paris and 155
kilometres
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 in
Tokyo
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.
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, 1927
million
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 passengers utilized the underground
railway
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 per year in
Tokyo
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 and 1191
million
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 in Paris
city
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. Next came
London
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 with represented 775
million
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 and Washington DC which averaged 144
million
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, Los Angeles was not far behind 50
million
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 and 45
million
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 in Kyoto.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, kilometres, tokyo, london, city, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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